Nina Yang
W&CIII
Ms. Guarino
04/14/2015
My treasures
“I’m going to sleep through this whole weekend.” My roommate said that
to me before she fell a sleep on Friday night. “Good for you! But I got work to
do this weekend: Learning more languages and become a linguist in the future!”
I said so with my eyes looking up, dreaming about my future. After shooting a
“Stop dreaming” glance at me, my roommate turned her back to me and fell a
sleep. With her glance, I decided to set an alarm for my challenge prevents myself
from sleeping and dreaming too much next day morning since morning is the best
time to learn.
Day
2 and day 3 of my 30-day challenge were in weekend, but it didn’t mean that I’m
going to be a slacker and skip the time to learn. In stead, when I woke up 2’o clock
in the afternoon on Saturday, I realized that I have my challenge waiting for
me to complete it. When I was confusing about the question “Why didn't
my alarm clock wake me up?” my roommate came in and screamed on the top of her
voice: “Your alarm rang like crazy this morning, everyone on campus woke up
except you!" The least thing I wanted to see yesterday finally happened
on me. I finished my “lunch” in a hurry, and started to think about what
today’s word going to be. I was thinking about learning a German word yesterday,
so I decided to learn a word about treasure time in German after all this mess
happened on me. Time is always a valuable treasure to everyone, and we shouldn’t
waste our time. “wertschätzen” in German means “value”. The letter in German is
pretty different from English in writing. Every word in the new languages for
me seems interesting and fancy. On the next day, I spent my whole day in
library to study for the SAT I’m going to take in May. At the end of the day, I
decided to learn a word from Spanish. Since I was in the library all day long,
I would like to learn “study” in Spanish, which is “estudio”. It’s not that
different with English’s “study”, and you can probably guess what’s the word
means in English. Now I understand why many Americans learn Spanish. It’s
because there is not only a huge amount of population who speaks Spanish in the
U.S, but also it’s kind of easy for an English speaker to learn since they are
quite similar.
People are always asking “Why is Monday so
far from Friday, and Friday so near to Monday?” This is exactly what I’m
thinking about when my alarm rings on every Monday morning. So I got up, went
to the breakfast, and then went to class as if I was a zombie. All day long, I
was thinking about “I’m a zombie”, so it made me curious about how to say “zombie”
in other languages. To my surprise, in Turkish “zombie” is called “zombi”, and
it’s almost the same capering to English.
It’s the fifth day of my 30-day challenge
now. Looking back at my words, they are like little stars that I collected
everyday, and I feel kind of proud of myself for my persist in this challenge.
Some of the words are funny to learn, and some of them are intellectual to learn.
However, they are all going to be the treasures of mine when the 30 days are
gone.
I like her way of connect the words she learned from her daily life.
ReplyDeleteI want her to give more specific details about how she learn to pronounce and feel about the words, but not just compare with English.
She should talk more details about one or two words instead of all of them.
I like her ending about her feeling of the 30 days challenge, but her paragraphs need more connection; I feel like they are separate.
I think she used too much I as the start of the sentences.
1. I like the way you describe the process of learning words from other languages. You have a lot of details, which make your blog more interesting.
ReplyDelete2. I kind of want to hear more about how you learn the new words and how you remembered them.
3. Maybe you can add some thing other than description in the beginning?
4. You may split your second paragraph to some short paragraphs, since you has already separated the "zombi" one.
5. "my roommate came in and screaming on the top of her voice"I think scream should be in past tense.
I agree with Amanda that you have some tense issues, especially some things in present tense that should be in past tense. For example, say "fell asleep" instead of "fall a sleep." I actually disagree with Leo that you have too many sentences starting with I -- I see more variation. Finally, I like your ending and how you connected the word treasure to your ending!
ReplyDeleteI like the ending part, although it is the common goal of ours.
ReplyDeleteI want hear more about the new words and how did you learn them.
More details about the words you learn will be better
I guess most of the parts do not relate to new words.
The least thing I want to see yesterday finally happened on me. wanted maybe